Carlin: First of all, this ain't my own thinking. I read this on Patrick Colm Hogan's "Cognitive Science, Literature and the Arts", a book you can find a preview of here
. He is exemplifying the concept I'm trying to explain with music, but I think this applies too.
Before we start, we have to assume that human minds have two types of memory: short term and long term memory. Short term memory is cyclical, and has a short span between those cycles, about thirty seconds. When there is a stream of new information input that overwhelms this cycle span, memory struggles to keep on until it cannot cope with it, losing track of what's going on, thus leading to process this new information as the same. Therefore, as the brain is registering this information as the same, leads to boredom.
Applying this theory to your case, Romulus, your outstanding dominion of language leads you to elaborate your sentences and syntax a bit too much for the attention span of people, which means your message is not properly delivered to the audience. Therefore, you should find an appropriate blend between elaborate and appealing language. I'm not saying that you should resource to plain statements worthy of the most simple minds. Try not to be obscure and baroque, but elaborate and pristine. You should find a path between the Neandertal-ish way of communicating that those Jimmys on Jersey Shore use, and an unintelligible mumbo-jumbo that not even the sharpest mind can follow. And, in my opinion, you are closer to this second option I'm stating here.
But don't you think that this phenomenon applies only to the inferior minds of the serfs, no. Colm Hogan (who I believe has a mind way above the average) admits he experiences this confusion when facing Arnold Schoenberg's piano compositions. This phenomenon applies both to the most obtuse and the most brilliant minds. Therefore, I suggest you tone down your language a little bit if you want your message reach as many consciences as possible.
OOC: I don't have the copy of "Cognitive Science, Literature and the Arts" with myself, I borrowed it from my University's library, so I can't tell which Schoenberg's piece Hogan is referring. I'd have to resource to my notes, but I don't know exactly where they are, and it is a bit late here to bother. it is a pity this comes in IC in the main thread, as it can be used in a promo within a show, and in case I use it, it won't be as effective as it can be, but still, I'm glad I can use this as IC material, even though is a bit of a trick, as Carlin doesn't necessarily know about this, but the real life man behind the character does, and he (me) is using it for his own advantage.